Below is my offering for this week’s ‘Friday Fictioneers’ Challenge from Rochelle. You can check out the challenge and learn how to take part at this link: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/01/16/18-january-2013/
SURVIVORS?
She was about to polish the menorah when the phone rang.
“They’re coming! They’re two blocks east of you! Run! Hide!”
Cold, paralyzing terror washed through her. She screamed for Susan.
She came, still holding her crayons. “What, Mama?”
“We have to leave, Honey. Right now!” Coats, scarves, her pittance of money . . . .
“But, Mama –“
“Right now! Don’t argue!” Trembling violently, she dragged Susan out the door.
She’d tried to believe it wouldn’t come to them. “Oh, God of Abraham, Isaac, and Jacob, please, please deliver us . . . .”
The Happy Wordcrafter 
Such terror….a shame that a menorah brings out such sad stories but it is history…nice job here you….
Thank you very much. I appreciate your taking the time to read it and let me know.
And yes, I was thinking after I wrote the story: it is a sad truth that the story almost tells itself because it is reality that was repeated so many hundreds of times.
Another sad reminder. Nicely done.
Thank you. And thanks for taking the time to let me know.
Terrifying and so dark.
the tension in this piece is excellent.
Thank you. And thanks so much to taking the time to read it and comment.
Wow, that comment of mine didn’t work well! Let’s try again:
I think many believe it wouldn’t come to them. Well-told.
janet
I know the first one went through but there were several typos, which made me crazy. Feel free to delete the first one and leave the second, corrected one if you like.
I know that feeling! I’ll delete the first one, so you won’t have to think about the typos being there for all to see.
Dear Sandra,
A lot of holocaust stories this week. Yours is among the best. Good build of tension and urgency.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you for those encouraging words, Rochelle. Originally, this photo prompt seemed particularly difficult. Yet when the story came to me, it flowed quickly and smoothly. I wondered about that, but then realized the tragic truth behind that fact: This story happened so many times to so many people in reality that it virtually tells itself.
Nice Sandra, Very realistic.
Thank you. Of course, I can’t actually take much credit for the realism, since it comes from the fact that this story actually took place in real life for hundreds and hundreds of people.
Well yes, but…
That was frightening!
Oh, wow! You couldn’t have paid the piece a nicer compliment! Thank you.
Hi Sandra,
Great job of capturing a scary moment. Ron
Thank you. This prompt was a real challenge.
i wish we could say this was a time in history that is behind us, but it isn’t. these things still happen to other people in other places of the world. well done.
Thank you so much, Rich.
And, yes, these things still happen and have the potential for happening when a citizenry allows itself to be deceived by leaders with a personal agenda and who use “more money for you if you give us more government control” propaganda. It’s something every free nation needs to be on guard against.
Well written and with tension, and the open ended end added to the value of the story.
Thanks so much, Bjorn. Appreciate the encouragement.