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Friday Fictioneers – 6/6/14 — ‘Home’

 

Friday Fictioneers, here I come again. Now, the rest of you can sit around with Doug with your feet propped up if you want to, but I’m going exploring for an ancient city. Anybody else who would like to try your hand at creating a 100-word story based on the unique picture below – Douglas M. MacIlroy’s picture, by the way – hop over to the FF home place and check out the details of how and why.  (Also, hop over to Doug’s site and check out his header: amazing — mesmerizing — see for yourself!)  

My story’s below the photo.

DOUGLAS M. MACILROY'S FEET PHOTO

 

HOME

The aged archaeologist sat gazing into the fire, owning contentment for the first time in his 85 years.

He journaled these words: “At age 15, I sat in a classroom gazing at a tablet. Suddenly, it disappeared, and in its place, as through a window, I saw a mountain.  I knew it, yet I didn’t.  But I knew I’d find the ancient city – this city — carved inside.

I was born here, but can’t remember how or why I left. I only know it’s beckoned me in my dreams all my life, and I’ve searched the world for 70 years.

Finally – today – I am home.”

 

 

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31 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – 6/6/14 — ‘Home’”

  1. I like the thought of archaeology,, but the patience would put me off,, the first thing I thought of was Sean Connery in Indiana Jones…hope you dont mind me saying… 100 words always seem a bit short for me.

    1. Don’t mind your mentioning Sean Connery at all. I hadn’t thought of him, but then I wasn’t sure where I was going with this piece — almost all the way through it. I started it and changed direction three times. Then I finally just went back to the beginning and started new. I finally ended up where I think I wanted to go, but whether I did nor not, I ran out of words. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

    1. Thank you, Gilly. It was a very short adventure, of course, with just 100 words to use. By the time I finally started getting somewhere, the trip was over. Thank you for taking the time to read it and comment.

    1. Thank you. The picture itself had the feel of being suspended between two worlds. The juxtaposition of one of the most modern pieces of technology with the sense of isolated, pioneer habitat invoked by the environment of the photo was a real challenge. But it’s just like Doug to do that to us, and I’m going to tell him that when I go to his site later today.

        1. Of course, I did not explain that by “modern technology” I meant an iPad, but the reason was that when I first saw the photo, I saw the inset as an iPad with the art work on the screen. Later, I realized it could have been a framed picture, but the iPad concept just wouldn’t go away, and that’s what gave me the “two-world” feel.

          1. It was actually his laptop in a photo he’d sent me just for the fun of it. I wanted to use it as a prompt but the screen was too bright and hazy. So he came up with the idea of photo shopping in the Hokusai painting. It’s one of my favorite prompts ever, but then maybe it’s because I know the whole story behind it. 😉

          2. It was definitely a challenge. I told him in my comments on his piece that I KNEW before I saw the name that it was his photo. I also told him I didn’t know whether to say “Thanks for the challenge,” or to just say, “Whew! Glad that’s over!”

  2. Isn’t there a full decade there that’s not accounted for? You said he started out at fifteen, then it was sixty years later & he’s eight five. It’s a really good tale in the tradition of Rip Van Winkle

    1. Oh, you are SO RIGHT! Thanks for catching that. I’ll change my text right now. You know, something kept nagging at me about those numbers when I wrote them, but I was so involved with trying to figure out where I was going to end up on this story that I just put off really thinking about the math. It must have been those 10 missing years that kept trying to get my attention. Thanks again.

  3. Dear Sandra, Good story. I felt like there were two worlds some of the time. I think the 100 words is a challenge and I enjoy that goal each week. It is harder to “make every word count” as Rochelle puts it. I enjoy this FFF so much and it is much more fun than working a crossword puzzle (attempting to stay within the parameters set). Fun club to write in! I really did like your story! Thanks, Nan 🙂

    1. I enjoy the challenge too. It helps me stay on top of my tendency to wordiness. But I couldn’t help giving Doug a hard time about his picture and it’s extra challenge with that feeling of two worlds in one. And, for some reason, I just knew it was his before I saw the name.
      Thanks for reading and commenting. I hope I can get around to everybody’s before the link goes down.

  4. Dear Sandra,

    You captured something elusive with your story. That feeling that we’ve lived before, that there are mysteries and wheels within wheels in the workings of the Universe. I love how the Archeologist knows he is home. Very well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    P.S. Thanks for liking the picture and for doing it complete justice with your words.

    1. Thanks a lot, Doug. I honestly didn’t know where I was going with this story until I got there. It was a unique experience. I started it three times, and still wasn’t quite sure of the ending until I was writing it. Life is full of little adventures, isn’t it?

      I hope some of my readers who are not part of FF see my note about your header photo and hop over to your site to check it out. I have always found that combination you’ve create rather mesmerizing, and I thought it was a good chance to give it a plug.

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