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Friday Fictioneers – 2/6/15 — ‘The Call of the Chitwood’

Friday Fictioneers is a fun way to interact with other writers around the world and also to hone and discipline your writing skill by forcing yourself to tell a whole story in just 100 words.  Hop over and check out the details for participating in the challenge.  My story is below the picture.

MAZE -- MELANIE GREENWOODPhoto prompt is from Melanie Greenwood.

 

THE CALL OF THE CHITWOOD

Nora woke. Was it? … Yes … the call of the Chitwood bird: silver-sweet; compelling.

Rising swiftly, she ran to the maze leading to the gazebo, which harbored the locked door to the ‘other side.’ She knew the legend: Only a young virgin could hear the Chitwood’s call; if she obeyed instantly, she’d find the rainbow light bursting through the keyhole. Then, for only three minutes, she could gain entrance.

Her breath caught at the brilliant light. She hurried through the familiar maze, her eyes on the door. Stopping once, she looked back. But light engulfed her, sang to her, pulled her into itself. She lifted the door latch and stepped through.

 

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21 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – 2/6/15 — ‘The Call of the Chitwood’”

  1. Confucius said, Virginity is not like a bank account. If you save it, it doesn’t draw any interest….or was that Benjamin Franklin? Lovely tale. We are left wondering just where the light takes her, and was the price worth paying. 🙂

    1. I thought about characterizing her as a “pure young girl,” but that would have taken three words after all, so I succumbed to the easy way out — perhaps unfortunately for her. Thanks for reading and commenting.

  2. Dear Sandra,

    I liked the fairy tale feel of this and I’m dying to know what’s on the other side. Maybe people focused on the word virgin because it seems to be a foreign concept these days. 😉 (Aside from virgin wool or olive oil).

    Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. I truly did laugh out loud at your comment, Rochelle. I am working on a novel right now that has a character who is shocked to learn that the lead female character is still a virgin, and the revelation is used to accentuate the humor in the story (I hope). But for this piece, I think the reason I got such a kick out of the focus on “virgin” was that I really chose that particular word because it saved me from using three or four. I’ll just hope that whatever’s on the ‘other side’ includes romance for her so that all will not be lost.

  3. Beautifully told. I love that she stops to look back – a little bit of tension there – and how the light sings to her and engulfs her. Very dramatic. I’m sure she won’t be sorry she stepped through.

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